Jeff’s Bucket List

copyright Robbie Cheadle, story prompt

Jeff’s Bucket List

“Hi Mom! There you are. Jeff! I got Mom on Facetime. We’re at that monkey hot spring in Japan, Mom. The one on Jeff’s bucket list. Okay, there he goes. You see him? The monkeys look nervous. Okay, a few are coming over. They’re climbing on him. Oops, they’re holding him under the water. Jeff! You need help? Okay, he’s up. Um, I think the cops are here. Hold on.

“Hey, Mom. It seems this is a protected site. They arrested Jeff. Might need you to send some yen. No, yen. Please don’t send Jen. Okay, I’ll call you back.”

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  1. Hilarious, David! Excellent take.

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  2. I too think this is so funny. No one knows better than you about spotty phone connections when one travels.

    No, yen. Please don’t send Jen. So funny. 🙂

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    1. Thanks, my friend. I like writing this kind of story, where you can visualize everything through dialogue. You’re the master of dialogue so it’d be the kind of thing you’d be great at, I’m sure.

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      1. Such a nice thing to say.

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    1. They’re the worst. 🙂

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  3. James McEwan's avatar James McEwan says:

    to swim with dolphins on a bucket list, I’ve heard of. But, swim with monkeys this is a first. Fun piece writing this week.

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    1. Thanks, James. I honestly don’t know how the monkeys would react. Probably, as in the story, it’s not allowed to do that. If I’m ever in that area, I’ll report back.

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  4. Dale's avatar Dale says:

    Hahaha! Fulfilling those bucket lists can be a harrowing experience! Nicely done, David,

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    1. Yeah, you have to plan ahead for some of those. I’ve never made a bucket list since it would probably include everything, so I’ll just keeping doing what I can. 🙂 Thanks for reading.

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      1. Dale's avatar Dale says:

        For sure. I think I’d need a huge bucket 😉
        Always a pleasure, David.

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  5. Violet Lentz's avatar Violet Lentz says:

    Sounds like something almost got lost in translation. Very clever write.

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    1. Thanks, Violet. Glad you liked it. 🙂

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  6. GHLearner's avatar GHLearner says:

    And then Jen comes and doesn’t have a clue. This was too funny.

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  7. God, please not Jen; things are bad enough already.

    (A great script for scammers!)

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    1. haha, thanks Patrick. Glad you liked it.

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  8. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

    Chuckling as I read this. Poor Jeff, but worth it to get the box checked.

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    1. Yeah, hopefully. Maybe “get arrested” was on there too and he can check off two. 🙂

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  9. Angela Adams's avatar Angela Adams says:

    Hehehehe! You gotta research well when overseas. And don’t send Jen, unless she’s carrying yen. 🙂

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    1. Yeah, some bucket list items need more research then others. Thanks for reading!

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  10. Very creative and great dialogue! 🙂

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    1. Thanks, Brenda! It was a fun one to write. 🙂

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  11. Dear David,

    Yen. Don’t send Jen. Too funny. With my husband’s hearing issues, this sounds like some of our conversations. 😉 Fun stuff.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks, Rochelle. Yes, I’ve been there before, desperately trying to convey a few morphemes of information across a bad connection.

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