Raiding the Trophy Case

copyright Roger Bultot

Raiding the Trophy Case

You need shoes fast. You have no money. There is only one option left.

The Trophy Case.

That’s where Devin shows off the footwear of all his victims.

No one would ever think about stealing from Devin.

But you’re thinking about it now.

You’ll need a distraction. Devin parks his Mustang around back. Set a garbage fire nearby and you’d have five minutes, tops.

You’ll need a ladder.

It’s crazy risky.

It’s maybe your last night alive.

All you know is your little brother is running the New York marathon tomorrow and he’s not doing it in no ratty Keds.

27 Comments Add yours

  1. Danny James says:

    Yup, need something more than Keds.

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    Perhaps Devin could sponsor him

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    1. Haha, now there is a thought. I could see a story where gangs and drug lords try to rehabilitate their image by sponsoring sports teams and such.

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  3. James McEwan says:

    Lots of pride and high stakes in this one. Will he make it?

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  4. Bill says:

    Well done story, especially so in 2nd person. I hope it all works out for them.

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    1. Thanks, Bill. Yeah, I don’t write in 2nd person very often, but wanted to give it a try.

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      1. Bill says:

        Well done.

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  5. pennygadd51 says:

    Frightening story, David. I wouldn’t want to rob Devin’s trophy case!

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    1. Thanks, Penny. 🙂 Have a good week!

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  6. GHLearner says:

    Let’s hope Devin doesn’t notice. Does he count the shoes every day?

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    1. Probably not, although someone like Smaug the dragon who knew every single one of his trophies would make an interesting character.

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  7. msjadeli says:

    I’m glad he’s willing to do what it takes so his brother has a chance to shine. I hope the plan works. Good story!

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    1. Thanks, Lisa. Glad you liked it. Have a great week!
      -David

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You’re welcome and thank you, you also!

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  8. Dear David,

    Now there’s a dedicated brother. Devin sounds like one sinister dude. You have such a knack for the unexpected. Well done as always.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks, Rochelle. FF is such a great place to try new things. Thanks as always for your faithfulness in hosting it. Have a great week!

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  9. authorfleurl says:

    Another one I can relate to! Not stealing shoes but running marathons! Yes, a good pair of shoes maketh the runner. Otherwise, that finishing shute is a million miles away. Great story!

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    1. Yeah, the right pair of shoes make all the difference, especially with something like that. Thanks for reading and commenting.
      -David

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  10. elmowrites says:

    Creepy! There are surely easier marks than Devin. Isn’t there a shoe store in the ‘hood?!

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    1. I know, right? How hard is it to find a Foot Locker or something? They must be all closed or something. 🙂

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  11. Nobbinmaug says:

    Damn! That sounds like a scary-ass trophy case. I don’t like anybody’s little brother that much.

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    1. Yeah, really. I think I’d look for other options, myself, but I guess we can’t judge unless we’re in someone’s shoes, so to speak.

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  12. I just checked my closet to make sure my Nikes were still there. 🙂

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    1. Haha, I sure hope so. 🙂

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  13. Margaret says:

    I get a strong sense of your MC through your story. I really like the stream of consciousness approach you’ve used, and the second person POV works brilliantly here. He’s a good brother.

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    1. Thanks, Margaret. I’m glad it worked for you. I don’t generally like 2nd person, but it seemed to work in this situation and Friday Fictioneers is a great place to experiment, in any case. Thanks for reading.
      -David

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  14. granonine says:

    Well. His motive is to help his brother, and I hope he pulls it off without losing his life–which would be no encouragement to his brother at all!

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